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 Post subject: BG10: Lovelust
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BG10: Lovelust is now available here

This episode is about the Sweeties and the Stevensons. Everything happens in a single day, but a single day in the Stevenson Harem is always a frantic one. I actually planned this comic as a post-BG story about a year ago. The story was very different back then. But now it is an important part of the main story arc with important consequences. This also changes the plot of the next chapter a lot.

The working title for this project was "The Sweeties" when I started developing it. Once again, the title changed after I finished the cover. A similar change happened with BG9 Vengeance. The lesson here is, covers are more important than you might think.

You'll see that there is a slight problem with continuity here. Since this episode was inserted into the arc at the last minute, I did not have space to address the radical events that took place at the end of BG9. Before this change, the original BG10 would be starting with a short cemetery scene, where Peter and Jeff were paying their respects at Steve's funeral. I thought about putting that scene at the start of this episode, but that would totally ruin the mood and pace of this story. There is a panel in there where Peter and Maggie briefly mention the issue, but that is all. So, I'll leave it for now and fix the problem with a flashback scene later.

This is what you kids call a "character-development" episode, with longer-than-usual sex scenes and loaded dialogue. I'm pleased with the result myself and hope you like it too.

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again - another left field issue

but i have to first ask erenisch - did you plan this all out long before hand or was this something of a "newer" development?

however unlike Karma where i liked the randomness of it all - i have to say in Lovelust i did not like the primary plot projection

in fact all the anticipation i had built up for reading it turned a little sour as the comic went on


but for some spoilers

the fact Carol switched back to Paul's ownership not even half way through the story made Sherry and Carol's swap all meaningless now along with the mother and daughter with Peter plot line all but kaput

(and it made the last few scenes in BG8 rather pointless)

alot of us were looking forward to more scenes and interaction between Peter+Maggie+Carol in not just BG10 but in future comics as well

remember when you spoke of a "Sweeties" comic - we all assumed it was Maggie and Carol with Peter

now i can't even speculate what "Sweeties" would be about anymore

plus i was hoping Carol's "turnabout" in her point of view about her station would be focused on a younger Peter, someone she never ever would have expected, and not someone like Paul whom she was simply acquainted with before

plus the dialogue between Carol and Paul in the last 2 pages just seemed really out of place for both characters

Paul especially - why would he even give 2 cents worth of thought about Carol at this point in his life

and even enough to choose her over Sherry to bring to that "dinner party"

it just made no sense to me considering Paul's character

Lovelust was probably the only comic you've released where i thought it didn't end well

now for the good parts

from a character progression standpoint - Sherry was the real star of this comic even though Carol was the main POV

i thought Sherry's role in this issue was fantastic - minus of course the Paul + Carol interaction that practically left her out the last 1/4 of the comic

Sherry is behaving exactly how her character to date would and her interactions between the other slavegirls was something we needed to see on paper and not just picture in our minds that is happening behind the scenes

i mean you write and draw Sherry really well erenisch

it cannot be any clearer this is your favorite character :p


this was another comic that was left field (to me) because i (and i can't be the only one) thought Peter's relationship with his new slavegirls would get more spotlight since the last two issues have changed the direction of the BG series so much

but instead of slowing down - you changed it yet another direction

and is it just me - or does it seem like Paul is "taking over" as the male lead


edit - this is another question erenisch but i'll hide it in spoiler

i am also curious as to the title and cover of this issue as it just did not seem to fit with what the story itself was

what was the idea behind that?


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man i give up on these Secret Stash passwords... lol

the only one i got on my own was SC2

can anyone tell me what the hidden password was for Karma was

i only got Inferno for Society from the various clues laid out on one of the threads


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I've been trying to get into the Secret Stash for the last hour... nothing. :(

I think this was an excellent episode! I enjoyed it greatly.

There were a couple of developments and narrative choices that I didn't expect, but it was all good!

The only thing that I regret is that not only was there only a single disclaimer page, it was repeated at the end of the comic... I guess I've been spoiled. :lol:


(I guess 'Flogging Molly' was an inadvertent reference?)

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The sales page is working but it still has no pictures so they did not announce it yet. But thanks to Triona we crazy people can get in and buy it :D http://dofantasy.com/english/USAFC353Lovelust.htm


Guess what Iwill say: I LOVED it. :lol:

It is the perfect brithday gift episode. Great character work and dialogue. My favorite is still part 8, but part 10 is now in second place at the top. The ending is not a shocking twist in this one but I was really satisfied and intrigued with the last image especially. :D :D

I agree that Sherry is perfect in this comic even she is not the main star. Very interesting twists in the middle and very unexpected choices in the plot. Great work.

Maggie and Carol are awesome with their dialogue and I liked the long scene the are together very much. I giggled a lot with the dialogue between Maggie and Carol.

will write a more detailed review later.


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oh and the video game is awesome :lol: :lol:


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It is out! :lol:


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I Lovelusted it! :D

Great stuff as always. I'm continually blown away by the range of story types in E's comics and this one was so different from all the others with a tight focus on just one day at the Stevenson house. I know why some people might be disappointed with the way the story went but I wasn't at all. I like the unpredictability of it.

Loved the video game too! so cool

Ernest and Nina's cameo was great!!! :D :D :D

I really liked that double take from Paul at the end - "hmm, okay" - after Carol flipped him the finger

Love Molly's shorter haircut - quite flattering

Also: really loved the glimpses you get of how the girls' thinking/mentality changes - Maggie has really taken to her role meanwhile Carol is learning to think like a slave but still has that bit of pre-enslavement defiance about her and Paul seems to appreciate it.


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Some more specific points to elaborate my overall enjoyment of this issue:

Does anybody think that Paul stuck his dick up Maggie's ass specifically to make Peter mad with the intent of getting Carol back? Or did he plan out his night in the few moments after Peter threw her at his feet?

I loved the way Sherrywas, in her own words, giddy about flogging Molly!

I am also impressed with Tawnie's reaction to actually holding Mr Whip, she's become quite a little psycho herself now.

The cameo was great, I actually recognized the images before I caught on with the altered name. :oops:

As easy as it is to manipulate a situation or browbeat a bareneck into putting out, I find it interesting that enough men want to fuck a 'willing' girl to make La Seduzione a viable theme for a restaurant. I'm also a big fan of the cazzo! (I think it should always come with an exclamation point!

I did expect that this issue would be focused more on the interactions between Maggie and Carol under Peter, but I am not unhappy with the direction the story went. However we do seem to be on a Paul kick after 'The Society' and 'The Hotel', but whatever; Graduation simply has to be Peter centric, doesn't it?


(alsoI still can't get into the Secret Stash...)

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 Post subject: Re: BG10: Lovelust
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Just finished it and I thought it was great

The artwork is astounding but that goes without saying now. Similarly the central characters continue to develop even now.
If i was to make criticism it might be that Gwen has remained a slightly two dimensional character throughout but she is a hot redhead so who cares huh? :D

I particularly loved the narrative foreshadowing in the kitchen scene which leads to a surprising outcome.

Time for the spoiler tag abuse bit Some of this is critical (slightly)

Is Peter now becoming too nice for the ECU? Throughout this episode, he acts in a manner inconsistent with ECU male norms.Protecting and being tender with a slave, frequent statements of love and giving up everything for a girl!

Paul is on top form in this one Raising the question s there anybody Paul will not manipulate to get his own way? He plays Peter like a harp from hell[ here. See Dr White's post[/spoiler

I would like to address a couple of the points made by fishstifck in the spoiler section of his post

[spoiler] I cannot agree that the last part was out of place. Carol was still drugged and said things that she would not normally, but it was a drug that lowered her inhibitions it didn't brain wash her. She meant it all. Paul was getting the date he had always dreamed of. I would send you back to Molly's comment about Paul ditching Sherry for his true slave. She was right- it is Carol not her


This was a Sweeties comic. Both Maggie and Carol have their arcs advanced considerably through it, though I do agree with your points about Paul and Sherry. If the story didn't develop down the route you expected that is not a fault of the writer it actually is to Erenisch's credit that the twists keep coming.

As for the Sherry storyline well . .

Now to go after the password.


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I loved this comic for so many reasons. First, I have to say that in my first read, I kinda had a few what the hell moments similar to Fishstick's points. But those only reinforced my admration of the storywriting skills displayed here, because the story always keeps us guessing and this plotline is never tired even after 10 episodes. You think you know these characters by now, but then you are totally surprised by what happens.

E manages to put a new level of "moral ambiguity" in the plot unlike we see in any other porn or erotic work. The relationships of all characters are genuine and interesting. Carol, Maggie, Sherry are having great character developments here.. Paul is still Paul, getting even more interesting. And finally Peter has shown some character development too. He grows a lot in this comic, and in unexpected directions. Even Tawnie has a big char development even though she wason screen for no more than 2 pages.

I liked the ending a lot. It was not a big punch like in BG7 or BG8, but it is probably more important than these... BG7 and BG8 were temporary plot points. But this one foreshadows a permanent one.

I don't agree with other members that Maggie and Carol should have more scenes together. If you think about it, E probably says everything he wants to say about all these characters and their relationships.
The Peter-Maggie relationship, well advanced to an extreme level.
Peter-Carol relationship, I think it also reached a top limit.
Most importantly, the relationship between Maggie and Carol, was very satisfactory for me, humorous and erotic at the same time..
Then we have big developments in Paul-Peter, Paul-Maggie and Paul-Carol relationships...
we also see how Paul-Sherry relationship progresses. It is a great feat to show all these without making a mess.

I agree with Rufus, only weak character in this story is Gwen. I think that is because her usefulness in the harem and the story arc of the BG has ended. We can see E is signalling her departure.

Another fun fact: It seems E wanted to appease the people who voted for Scarlet in the poll. Paul apparently bought both girls with the most votes, one for Sherry and one for... Carol? Who knows.

I also applaud the artist for the Nina Hartley cameo, which is spitting image. Though I have to confess that I missed it in my first read and noticed only after the forum comments. :oops:


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Great issue. The best one yet IMO. Just one thing...I hope we haven't seen the last of Gwen. (1st post btw)


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Great comic. Can a Master have two favorites? Please E tell me that Paul had the video camera at the end I want to see that threesome.

I loved the comic and thought it was great and I'm glad it wasn't about Peter Carol and Maggie.

I thought it was well done how you brought out Peter's feelings for Maggie. I especially like the image of her hugging Peter's leg. So I completely loved the interaction between the two.

Some reason when I was reading Peter's and Maggie's part at the end two songs jumped in my head. Jack and Diane by John Mellancamp and The River by Bruce Springsteen. I think you hit how two teenagers would react in that situation on the head.

The argumentwas great and something I saw coming. You used that scene brilliantly.

I also liked how this Comic developed Carol more. Now I don't if I like her or dislike her. She's a lot like Gwen. She has a lot of selfish moments in this comic and throws Maggie under the bus a couple of times. I can't think of Maggie doing that to her. Anybody who mistreats Maggie I dislike. So I guess that goes double for Paul because like Peter said she's not an anal slave.


I also think think the interaction between Paul and Carol are realistic. Carol is Paul's first love so I think that played a big part in the way he treated her. I also think for a change that Paul was hurt. Of course not physically but emotionally.

You also did a good job of foreshadowing in this comic. Both for what would happen later in the comic and future comics. Out of all the characters I don't think this is a spoiler but out of all the characters I feel sorry for Sherry. She may have won the last battle against Michelle but I don't see her winning this one. A small part hopes she does.

I find it interesting that Paul decided to let both Carol and Sherry sleep in his bed that night. This makes The Office more interesting as I'm wondering if Paul will give Sherry her dream and make her a permanent office girl. Both Paul and Carol seem not to like Maggie and Peter relationship and I wonder if they'll try to educate the kids and end their romance.

If I had anything negative to say is that I didn't like a couple facial expressions that Sherry had.

So I'll end this on how I began it. E did Paul still have a camera at the end? and will the office be out next month? :shock:

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badraven wrote:
Great issue. The best one yet IMO. Just one thing...I hope we haven't seen the last of Gwen. (1st post btw)



A long long long time ago E said something about a character having many masters. I don't know if E was just fooling around but if he wasn't it seems that Gwen might be that character, though I hope things work out so that she can stay in the harem. Just so that she can be with Tawnie. Not because I like Gwen but because I like Tawnie and Tawnie needs a friend.

and congrats on the first post. may many more follow.

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dougeee wrote:
badraven wrote:



A long long long time ago E said something about a character having many masters.



"Liet serves more than one master."

Oh...sorry.....wrong story... :lol:


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Though I should probably recuse myself from comment for obvious reasons, I have to say think this is a great comic and another breakthrough in terms of both art and story. It's strikingly beautiful and the character development is fascinating. Full of unexpected twists and turns. Love it!

P.S. - so does Nina.


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Just like to add that I liked the little game that Paul and Carol played and how Sherry was naive to it all.

Things I learned from the comic that are not spoilers.

Maggie
Is very strong
Likes playing video games
cost 8,000 bucks but Paul would have paid 20,000

Carol
Moves her head too much when giving BJ
Breast are natural

Gwen
horniest girl in the harem
Self loving is better than no loving

Tawnie
Even a pawn must hold a grudge

Paul
Likes to be called daddy
even though he's married he's had lots of dates with different women
isn't as big as he thought

Sherry
Rides in the trunk of the car.
Spent more time at Maggie's house than her own.

Mr. Whip
Turns good girls into evil girls.

I think that is it.

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Mr. Whip
Turns good girls into evil girls.
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:lol:

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Few more thoughts:

One thing I really loved was Puppycunt's character development. In the early days of her enslavement she corrects herself in her private thoughts switching from "Puppycunt" to "Tawnie" but by now even while Maggie is variously referred to to as Mags, Margaret Anne and Maggie much more so than Cumbunny by third parties and the other girls are also referred to often by their given name, she psychs herself up for the whipping by thinking to herself "Okay Puppycunt, concentrate and swing". I love that this has just become second nature to her

Also I really liked the detail of Maggie reprimanding her Mom for interrupting her when she's sucking her Master's cock. 8-) Very nice!

Still completely stumped by the secret stash password though. Tried all sorts of things and no joy yet. :cry:


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dougeee wrote:
A long long long time ago E said something about a character having many masters.

I'm not sure what I said, and in what context, but... If a female is not a private slave but a communal one (belongs to an institution or society) she would have many masters by definition.


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